I've been really busy at work, but I did set aside some time to complete an exercise from the book I'd mentioned in the previous post. The author asked the reader to write several openings that evoked emotion and caused the reader to ask questions. The key for the writer (in this case, me) is to stop before reaching the point of the action that starts the story.
Here are some that I came up with. The situations won't be clear, since they are just the beginning of several stories (real and imagined) in my life.
Are they engaging? Are they "powerful" openings?
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Opening 1:
Trapped! There was no way out. If I had only been a split-second sooner or a split-second later, I would have been spared the inevitable. My eyes met his and I knew it, but the reality was that there would be no escape now.
Opening 2:
Where am I?
There was noise all around. A loud banging, clanging, rattling sound. Then he realized he was moving. Or was it the room? He felt nauseated. He squeezed his eyes shut to keep from vomiting. That seemed to do the trick. He exhaled slowly.
When the nausea passed, he opened his eyes to peer at his surroundings. My leg, he thought. It had been casted from ankle to thigh. But why? Why couldn't he focus? If only he had been alert the night before.
Opening 3:
Applause and bright lights. I stumbled forward into the lightness because I knew it was expected. My cheek muscles tightened into what appeared to be a comfortable grin, but the shaking of my hands belied my facade of control. My heart raced at double or triple time the cadence of my leather soles tap, tap, tapping against the maple floor.
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3 comments:
Whoa! You reconditioned your blog (that was the only word that I could think of..). What happened to the New Service? Either way, the blog looks great and I'm looking forward to reading some of your stuff.
-Bryan
Hey Steve. I skimmed all the entries. I like your writing. I'll try and get back soon to analyze them and give you feedback. I have to admit that I hadn't actually come here yet.
Thanks...I appreciate it, Shelli.
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